the living game part 19
June 27th, 2012

the living game part 19

Time to get dangerous


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  1. Mord_Sith

    Friendly aid to the English side (like I’m a paragon on this! :D)

    Second panel: Family should end in a possessive (aka Family’s) despite how strange it may sound on the tongue, the family possesses the idea after all.

    Third Panel (bubble one): The Revangers, Earth’s mightiest heroes, I joined to collect (recollect is more like remembering) your data, to use it to…

    Third Panel (bubble two): If Paco’s interrupting him, it should end with a hyphen, rather than ellipses, as that indicates him coming to an abrupt stop, rather than trailing off.

    Fourth Panel (Paco bubble): Instead of lit, you probably mean light.

    Sorry, I just figured you could use a hand on this one, and while I’m rarely a Grammar Nazi (heck, I’m probably one of the worst offenders in that regard) hopefully this will at least help you communicate the idea better.

  2. Edd

    Damn, Mord_Sith is on a roll here.

    Re-collect means that you are either collecting data again, or remembering something. As in “I don’t recall if I left the stove on this morning”.

    Panel 3, second bubble: my company will sell (, and in so doing/thus/which will) save the economy

    And damn panel 4 is awesome.

  3. algeya

    I will fix it when I come back from the office
    edited.- fixed my apologies and you two guys have my gratitude ,I was all high and mighty because I didnt made mistakes the last time, I promess that I will more careful next time.

  4. Mord_Sith

    re·call/ri?kôl/
    Verb:
    Bring (a fact, event, or situation) back into one’s mind, esp. so as to recount it to others; remember.

    rec·ol·lec·tion/?rek??lekSH?n/
    Noun:

    The action or faculty of remembering something: “to the best of my recollection no one ever had a bad word to say about him”.

    Just type in define: [the thing you want to look up] to see the meaning in Google.

  5. algeya

    eh?????
    the more you know.

  6. Mord_Sith

    Just glad to be of service! 😀

  7. ejg

    no grammar corrections from me algeya mostly because I suck at grammar my self.

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