pilli remix 18
July 30th, 2014

pilli remix 18

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  1. ColdFusion

    Woo, such memories.
    So um, in this case you can’t really use ‘require’, it should just be ‘need’
    And you should put a comma after ‘win’ and ‘hips’ and take it out after ‘game’

  2. Algeya

    Arggg

  3. tavo2

    ps thanks, in fact I didnt write the dialogue in this one I got help from someone else a long time ago.

  4. man in black

    Now that didn’t backfire, did it?

  5. ColdFusion

    Sorry, not ‘win’ in first panel, ‘win’ in the second panel, that’s the ‘win’ that needs a comma.. and a period after ‘exactly’ in the second panel.
    and then a comma after ‘hips’ in the third, and remove the comma after ‘game’ in the fourth

    If it makes you feel better, most americans suck at this too. Nobody uses commas or apostrophes or colons properly.

  6. reynard61

    “The team with the most points at the end of the game, wins.”

    And, IIRC, the losers are sacrificed to the gods. (I’m sure that there are more than a few sports fans who wouldn’t mind seeing that happen these days after losing a bet on the Superbowl, World Series, or NBA Playoffs…)

  7. ColdFusion

    People often pause there but it’s not correct to put a comma there. If there was, it would be “The team, with the most points at the end of the game, wins”
    But it’s not an allusion, it’s a prepositional phrase followed by a one-word predicate

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